So I read through my posts from last week and I realised that I didn't really write any poetry despite finding so much to do with my name and birthday. I wanted to write something to do with the stuff I posted, but everything I came up with sounded like flarf, and I thought that it was kinda of boring, like I was making a joke that nobody would laugh at. I know that kinda contradicts itself, but it makes sense in my head. I decided to do something about what people might notice about me when they first meet me. I came up with lines mostly to do with appearance, but I still like what I've got so far! So this is my first draft, here it goes!
Green eyes
Brown hair
Skin pale like white skies
Freckled skin
Ears Pierced
Fingers short but thin
Polaroid prints
Music everywhere
Ink on my skin
Books stacked
Posters hung
Bookshelf space is lacked
Notebooks piled
I think I smiled
So this is what I've come up with, I think I like where I'm going, but I still feel like it's missing something or needs words to change, or more, or less. I don't know.
Hey Raeanne! I really like this idea, especially the stanza where you move away from the physical to "polaroid prints / music everywhere..." It stuck out because it was a shift from what I was expecting, thus I think its the most intriguing idea. I would suggest exploring non-physical traints a bit more, as well as maybe don't start with describing eyes, it felt a little cliche. Love your work!
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